in regards to previous post

[dzioo]

thank you to those who managed to give me some constructive criticism, now I know my mistakes and will gradually move to working on them. maybe in next 20 years I'll manage to be as amazing as you <333 just kidding XD

soooo after thinking over all the advice I got and doing some basic training with posemaniac, I'm posting first results


because Kate told me to work on twiggy girls (and Nina IS supposed to be a twiggy) and Megan told me to work on my stiff characters and all, here is my first excercise. I figured the best way to work on stiffness of my characters is to draw them doing sports. first stop - tennis. I have never played it nor really watched it so forgive me if the poses are impossible^^;
not sure if I'll let the girl lose any more weight but hey, this should be better, right?^^; I kinda like the one where she's stretching, looks pretty convincing to me. but I may be wrong.

any other advice would be loved! I'll work on my lines too, I promise^^;

Comments

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

I love the stretch; it seems very fluid and natural. the first post, with her hand on her hip, seems a bit exaggerated, which is fine for cartoony art but makes her hips/butt look overly large.

I like the bottom two with the tennis playing; the charging forward pose is very good, I think; the movement in the final sketch is really well done.

I don't see anything "off" about any of these pieces except what I noted regarding the first illo. XD

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

ELD just said what I was going to.i really like these

[dzioo.livejournal.com]

thank you^^ I'm happy you enjoyed it^^ and boy, you girls really are unanimous^^

[dzioo.livejournal.com]

thank you! I'm happy the stretch turned out ok^^
as for the first one, the training I'm undergoing now is about exaggerating a bit to make things look a little less stiff. so it's intended, but thank you for spotting it^^

thank you very much for overlooking those! <33

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

I'm glad to do it! Your art makes me want to start drawing again, then I realize it'd take time away from the writing and other things I do and talk myself out of it. But your work really impresses me.

[dzioo.livejournal.com]

awww, thank you! you used to draw? O_O now that is a surprise. part of me wants you to start again because I'm curious... but the other, LARGER part would rather preffer you to keep writing^^

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

I did my first comic book at the age of four. It was terrible. But I did it. So I have this love of storytelling in any medium!

And thanks, I'm probably far better at writing than drawing, but I do miss it.

[baka-oni-ri.livejournal.com]

pierwsza laska (wg mnie ^^' xD) ma troche za masywna gore w stosunku do dolu. trzecia jest boska. te dynamiczne tez sa boskie *_* ale tez mi sie wydaje ze dol jest za maly (moze za waski?)

[dzioo.livejournal.com]

dol w sensie biodra? czy o cos innego ci chodzi? hmmm... dzieki serdeczne, ciesze sie ze sie podobaja^^ jak masz jeszcze jakies uwagi to pisz <3

[baka-oni-ri.livejournal.com]

tzn dół jako całość wydaje mi sie za mały w 2 wymiarach - i na szerokosc i na dlugosc. Może na poczatek spróboj biodra zrobic szersze bo długosc nog jest osobniczo zmienna, może bedzie wygladac ok :)

z innych uwag, to do szczescia brakuje mi, by dziewczęce twarze były bardziej dziewczęce, ale na to nie zwracaj uwagi, bo to osobisty fetysz i upodobanie, a nie czuje sie jedną z tych co każą innym zmieniać styl, bo tak ;)

[baka-oni-ri.livejournal.com]

hmmm, jednak za mały. tak patrzę na tą pierwszą i gdybym do góry miałą zaczac rysować dół, to jej krocze wypadłoby pi razy drzwi w połowie tych ud, które jej zrobiłaś. Te nogi powinny byc jednak dłuzsze i szersze/grubsze :) w połowie jej ud (no dobra, w 1/3 - tam gdzie koncza jej sie palce dłoni) mniej więcej powinien dopiero wypadać staw biodrowy. wygląda tak, jakbyś zgubiła jej miednice :)

[dzioo.livejournal.com]

nie zgubilam, tylko wygielam do tylu XDD poza malo rzeczywista ale moze sprawiac wrazenie, ze pozbawilam ja paru czesci ciala^^; z tego co widze to na pewno na pierwszym rysunku zrobilam jej za wysoko kolana to moze stad takie wrazenie. a na swoja obrone mam tylko tyle, ze ona jest malenka^^; nawet 150cm wzrostu nie ma, stad troszke inne proporcje^^; i chuda miala byc, bo mi tak knyp kazala, wiec jest chuda^^;

[duokai.livejournal.com]

The stretching one is definitely the best! Followed by the tennis action shots which I find remarkably good for someone who keeps saying that she can't do action ^^ The right one might have a little weird arm move with the racket but I don't know for sure as usual. The left one is as far as I can see a really good movement pose though! (I also noticed the similarity between wielding a tennis racket and a frying pan. At least for some persons XD)

Oh, and on a personal plane I totally approve your choice of training object ^^

[dzioo.livejournal.com]

awww thank you^^ I never thought it would turn out well, it's a difficult pose to make><
hey, I can't ok? my action shots have never been really realistic, and pretty static>< and I need my training><
may be. as I said, I've never played tennis so I'm not sure how your wrist is supposed to go from one position to another><
hahaha now that you mention it, it really is XDD

[kurunya.livejournal.com]

Your drawing are stiff? My god....your friend puts me on shame. >.>

That's awesome sketches.

[dzioo.livejournal.com]

they are^^; I never really noticed it before they told me so^^; so now I'm working on it^^

thank you^^